Oblivion

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I got a little melodramatic last night and had a go at writing… It turned out a little bleak, but here it is… It’s called

Oblivion

She cocoons herself inside,

Her self-pity stifling her reality;

Turning the tap of sympathy off, hard.

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She jams the everlasting, nerve-wracking ‘please’,

And the never-ending, nail-biting ‘help’,

All that’s left is the dull, tortured ‘me’.

-

It curls inside her, settling down to sleep,

A white fog of cotton; sterile, institutional.

Sour as coconut, Tart as saccharine.

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It swirls inside her psyche,

Like scented talc in a windowless room;

Caulking the cracks, holding the silence in.

-

Outside they wait, muttering pleas.

Their fingers nervously tap, tap, tap,

Against the chalky shell of her solitude.

-

But she slumps against the wall,

Her fingernails etching her story into her skin

As she lets her self-pity stifle her reality.

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Full props to Andrew for helping me edit it, too!

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2 Responses to “Oblivion”

  • iDigDan Says:

    Not sure what I think of the Poem, but you know me. Im not verry edumacated like that. But I like the picture!

  • Andrew Says:

    Well, I’ve already liked it :-) . But, I think you got rid of (changed) that line I loved!!!

    Though very polished, excellent post editing process, it comes out looking complete. well done. :-) .

    ALso like when structure is played around with, the “please help me” at the end of the sentence. Have I missed anything?

    Also, *hugs*

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